the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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is showing UK graduate and postgraduate
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who did not do
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work
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and what did they do after leaving
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college in 2008.
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activity after college is given below. in the first bar chart
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aim of graduate
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college
in 2008. 17735
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were done
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part
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jobs. 3500
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voluntary
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and 29665
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done future study, In
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were unemployed.
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who continued their future studies were higher in quantity.
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work
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were lower
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those student
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who continued their future studies. The rank of unemployed student
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less than
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. The number of
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was quite low. the number of postgraduate
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2008 (deducting full-
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) almost 3000 were in
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. The
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who
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continued
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studies
were 2725. The
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who did
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part
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jobs were 2535, which
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those
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who continued their
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studies
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, 1625
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were
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unemployed
. In the end, the
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who did voluntary
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were just 345
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