The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The proportions of three different nutrients in breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks which negatively affect health when overconsuming are compared in three charts. It is clear from the charts that
while
sodium and saturated fat are eaten mostly
in
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dinner, there is too
much added
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sugar
consumed in snacks.
Additionally
, American residents eat the least nutrients in their breakfasts. In terms of dinner, the percentages of sodium and saturated fat consumed are highest, at 43% and 37% respectively,
while
the figure for added
sugar
is significantly lower, at 23%. Meanwhile, the proportion of added
sugar
in snacks is higher than
other
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meals, at 42%, compared to only 14% and 21% of sodium and saturated fat eaten by the US people in
this
meal. In terms of breakfast, the rates of all three nutrients consumed are in the same figure, at around 16%, and become the healthiest meals of inhabitants in the USA in a day. Turning to lunch, the consumption of added
sugar
makes up the smallest proportion, at 19% of the total consumption
in
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a lunch.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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