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It is often argued most corporations provide employee uniforms that they must wear at any given time. This essay argues that although wearing uniforms causes discomfort to the workers, I believe that wearing a uniform gives a sense of identity.

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It is often argued that most corporations provide
employees their
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employees, their
 uniforms that they must wear at any given time.
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 essay argues that
although
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 wearing uniforms causes discomfort to the workers, I believe that wearing a
uniform
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 gives a sense of
identity
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. On the one hand, wearing uniforms shows a unique representation of the worker as an employee to the
company
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.
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 means that employees wearing uniforms have a feeling that they are part of the organization. It will give them the spirit of oneness wearing the same clothing in the workplace.
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, wearing a
company
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uniform
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 provides easy recognition whenever workers are outside the
company
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.
For example
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, a doctor wearing a medical gown in a public place gives immediate recognition of being a part of a medical organization.
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, wearing a specific
uniform
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 gives a unique
identity
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. On the one hand, wearing a
uniform
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 at all times gives an uncomfortable working condition.
This
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 means that workers find it difficult to wear a
uniform
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 for a longer period.
As a result
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, the employee will not be able to work efficiently because of the discomfort in wearing an annoying
uniform
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.
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, a lady security guard wearing a tight above knee pencil cut skirt and high heels standing at the entrance door of an office finds it difficult to handle the discomfort of the tight skirt and leg pain from the heels.
However
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, wearing a
uniform
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 is a factor that affects the working performance, but I believe it is important for an
identity
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 and recognition. In conclusion,
although
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 wearing a
uniform
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 will not always provide a comfortable working environment, but wearing it at all times gives a unique
identity
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 of belonging to a
company
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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