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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local  inhabitants ant the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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In the recent global village time period, the number of the travellers
increase
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increases
 rapidly. There are some drawbacks and gains of international travelling. I think, the counting of pros is more as
compare
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compared
 to the cons of visitors from other nations. In my piece of writing, I shall shed light on the positive and negative outcome of the people come to visit areas across the world. Starting with benefits side,
firstly
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, an economic growth of a country
is widely depend
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widely depends
 upon the upward curve of the pilgrims
.
Accept space
.
 The swearing quantity of the visitors
greatly participate
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greatly participates
 in the development of the host nation by multiplying
income
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the income
 with various taxes. To illustrate, the masses have to undergo many formalities and proper
crateria
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
creature
crater
 to get the tourist visa, while, the welcoming nation
receive
Suggestion
receives
 various funds like embassy fee, and perhaps, the visitors
also
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 unlock the door of the shopping and use means of transport to mobile one place to another
,
Accept space
,
 which is the source of the revenue for the host area.
Secondly
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, the local people
also
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 come across the different cultures by meeting new human beings and shift their mind compass to learn new things throughout the world.
However
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, there are fewer negative impacts of the tourism company, with the explosion of the population, all the countries are in the lap of
pollution problem
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the pollution problem
pollution problems
, with
addition
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the addition
 of more humans
this
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 issue can become critical. To illustrate, the historical places are the hot- spot of various kinds of environmental dangers, so, by calling more mankind from other places is directly
invitation
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invited
 to the climate problem. I think
,
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,
nodoubt
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no doubt
, there is
serious issue
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a serious issue
the serious issue
 of
pollution which
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pollution, which
 is faced by the countries while increasing travellers, but, the tourist is the best way to grow the country.
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