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Should the same laws which prohibit the sale & consumption of heroin be applied to tobacco? Discuss

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Since time immemorial drugs cause many problems to the society. Drugs addicted isolate himself from the public and became burdened
to
Suggestion
with
 their families. Drugs unable them to do any work and lead them in a world where they are alone.
Although
 government makes laws to eradicate drugs from the community, but it comes back in different forms. The problem is drugs readily available in markets, Drugs which were banned by the government called ‘Heroin’ causes many problems to the individual. People believe that
this
 law should
also
 be applied to tobacco. Tobacco is mainly found in cigarette, which is easily available in markets. Drugs lead the people away from the world and drugs addicted leave their job and families and burden to the country. They are the main assets of a nation and they are destroying their life in addiction of drugs. Government should take serious steps towards other drug as on heroin and save the country mankind. Due to scarcity of money, drugs abuse indulges in criminal activities
such
 as robbery, terrorism. These people are too much addicted to drugs and are unable to do any work to feed their families. They became burdened with their families, even on country
also
. Families of drugs addicted have to face many problems because of them. They do not have enough money to feed them and pay for their treatment. To conclude, I suggest that government should ban tobacco sale and consumption as applied on heroin. Drugs not only eat up society like termites, but
also
 jeopardize for prosperity and future generations.
Submitted by Zeeshanzaib on

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