When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent, do you agree or disagree

Many people argue that wages are
major factor
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major factors
a major factor
in order to decide to pursue
career
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careers
. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view. There are two main reasons why salary
do not play
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does not play
a central role in choosing a work. One reason is that, working
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
plays an
essencial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
role with a target of making a decision follow
job
. Because it is
incredible
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incredibly
modern with sufficient facilities, keeping their staffs.
However
, it is extremely
competive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
and under a lot of
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
pleasure
. They must cope with
numerous challenges
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the numerous challenges job
job
, making affect for their health and physical.
Therefore
, they do not suffer from working and abolishing
.
Accept space
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, many people apply for a
job
because of their passion. They want to communicate with a large variety of
collegues
the body of faculty and students of a college
colleges
with an aim of enhancing skills,
spanding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
social relationships and improving their life experiences. Because family
possess
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possesses
a tremendous amount of money that they do not need to make a living.  Apart from the
pracical
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
reasons expressed above
.
Accept space
.
I believed that income
also
plays a vital role in determining.
Firtsly
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Firstly
, it is
meter
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metered
so as to value ability work each other.
For example
, the same a nine to five
job
, heavy workload and position, those do better and have influence
languges
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
languages
language
will be paid higher.
Secondly
, anyone
also need
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also needs
money to pay for
thier
of them or themselves
their
lie. Everything
are bought
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is bought
by
money
Accept comma addition
money, such
such
as food, drink, big houses, cars, beautiful clothes,...Money help people maintain their life
,
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,
establish their
relationships
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relationship
and build an own
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
career
.
Accept space
.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly believed that salary do not
first
choice when choosing a
job
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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