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It is said that the fast pace of our every days life, as the direct result of the rapid development of telecommunication technology and travel industry, has a negative effects on individuals, nations and the globe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Without any shadow of a doubt, the rapid progression and development of a modern
technology
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 pave the way for convenience
life
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.
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, footprints of
technology
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 can be seen in different facets of human
life
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, ranging from an individual's personal
life
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 to larger communities like nations. It is a subject of a protracted debate that, whether the devastating impacts of rapid
advancement
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 in the telecommunications industry and the travel industry outweigh their merits or not.
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this
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 argument has several aspects that deserve the attention I'm of the opinion that the advantages of applying modern
technology
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 in human
life
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 greater than its disadvantages.
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 essay will elaborate on both sides of
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 argument. The
first
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point
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 to support the importance of the technological presence in the societies is that it helps to
increase
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 the decent standard of living by facilitating the routine
life
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. Including, some devices like mobile phones, computers, faxes and etc. These are which considered as telecommunications devices have opened new doors for human to boost their interactions with other people or on a larger scale among nations. A good illustration of
this
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 fact is the current living in the COVID-19 era. Thanks to
internet
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 and high-tech devices most of the tasks related to work, education, and house chore purchasing can be carried out from home as perfect as in conventional ways.
Moreover
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, modern telecommunication
technology
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 can be regarded as an affordable approach in terms of
time
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, and an economy derives by decreasing the number of commuters, the cost of fuel and service, and other side's costs.
Life
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 possessed with speed implies the explanation of people's circles. In the past people used to be bound by boundaries, in which people wouldn'
t
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 able to communicate with other nations. There would be just a particular group of people that capable to travel under the hard conditions for a long period of
time
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. These days, the advent of the
technology
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 provide human with appropriate situations of travelling anywhere they want in the shortest
time
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 possible
also
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 it has made them capable to easily communicate with other nations or interact with other cultures without even seeing them directly in a real
life
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.
Although
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 technological
advancement
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 is beneficial, it
shouldn
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'
t
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 overuse.
People specially
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People, especially
People especially
 youth are being under the greater influences of
technology
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 like social media than more mature people. Convenient access to the
internet
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, online games, and some telecommunications applications foster an
individualization
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individualistic
 outlook and lead people to the isolation
lifestyle
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.
Additionally
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, the fast-paced
lifestyle
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 is responsible for an upsurge in
lifestyle
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-related problems.
For instance
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, globalization dominance dictates that if people can'
t
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 be abreast of the latest development, they won'
t
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 be able to compete in
this
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 ferocious world. It provokes a significant psychological burden to people, especially the young generation and leads to psychological disturbance like depression and anxiety.
Also
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, the fast rhythm of
life
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 requires people to enhance efficiency,
as a result
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, in contemporary societies people are facing
automation
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.
Although
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automation
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 is
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 in order to
increase
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 productivity it brings about many drawbacks
such
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 as unemployment, redundancies, and layoffs.
Consequently
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, the related psychological disturbances are beginning to manifest. According to the facts outlined above,
technology
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-related
advancement
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 has brought many merits and convenience to modern
life
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. People now enjoy greater well-being and prosperous
life
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.
However
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,
this
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point
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shouldn
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'
t
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 be ignored that modern
technology
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 if utilized without considering the social and human psychology might cause difficulties for societies.
he
Suggestion
His
He
first
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point
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 to support the importance of the technological presence in the societies is that it helps to
increase
Use synonyms
 the decent standard of living by facilitating the routine
life
Use synonyms
. Including, some devices like mobile phones, computers, faxes and etc. These are which considered as telecommunications devices have opened new doors for human to boost their interactions with other people or on a larger scale among nations. A good illustration of
this
Linking Words
 fact is the current living in the COVID-19 era. Thanks to
internet
Use synonyms
 and high-tech devices most of the tasks related to work, education, and house chore purchasing can be carried out from home as
perfectly
Suggestion
perfect
 as in conventional ways.
Moreover
Linking Words
, modern telecommunication
technology
Use synonyms
 can be regarded as an affordable approach in terms of
time
Use synonyms
, and an economy derives by decreasing the number of commuters, the cost of fuel and service, and other
side
Suggestion
side's
 costs.
Life
Use synonyms
 possessed with speed implies the explanation of people's circles. In the past people used to be bound
with
Suggestion
by
 boundaries, in which people wouldn'
t
Use synonyms
 able to communicate with other nations. There would be just a particular group of people that capable to travel under the hard conditions for a long period of
time
Use synonyms
. These days, the advent of the
technology
Use synonyms
 provide human with appropriate situations of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 anywhere they want in the shortest
time
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 possible
also
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 it has made them capable to easily communicate with other nations or interact with other cultures without even seeing them directly in a real
life
Use synonyms
.
Although
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 technological
advancement
Use synonyms
 is beneficial, it
shouldn
Use synonyms
'
t
Use synonyms
 overuse.
People specially
Accept comma addition
People, especially
People especially
 youth are being under the greater influences of
technology
Use synonyms
 like social media than more mature people. Convenient access to the
internet
Use synonyms
, online games, and some telecommunications applications foster an
individualization
Suggestion
individualistic
 outlook and lead people to the isolation
lifestyle
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the fast-paced
lifestyle
Use synonyms
 is responsible for an upsurge in
lifestyle
Use synonyms
-related problems.
For instance
Linking Words
, globalization dominance dictates that if people can'
t
Use synonyms
 be abreast of the latest development, they won'
t
Use synonyms
 be able to compete in
this
Linking Words
 ferocious world. It provokes a significant psychological burden to
people especially
Accept comma addition
people, especially
 the young generation and leads to psychological disturbance like depression and anxiety.
Also
Linking Words
, the fast rhythm of
life
Use synonyms
 requires people to enhance efficiency,
as a result
Linking Words
, in contemporary societies people are facing
automation
Use synonyms
.
Although
Linking Words
automation
Use synonyms
 is
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 in order to
increase
Use synonyms
 productivity it brings about many drawbacks
such
Linking Words
 as unemployment, redundancies, and layoffs.
Consequently
Linking Words
, the related psychological disturbances are beginning to manifest. According to the facts outlined above,
technology
Use synonyms
-related
advancement
Use synonyms
 has brought many merits and convenience to modern
life
Use synonyms
. People now enjoy greater well-being and prosperous
life
Use synonyms
.
However
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,
this
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point
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shouldn
Use synonyms
'
t
Use synonyms
 be ignored that modern
technology
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 if utilized without considering the social and human psychology might cause difficulties for societies.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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