Medical studies have shown that smoking not only leads to health problems for the smoker, but also for people close by. For this reason, smoking should not be allowed in public places. Opponents argue that the forbiddance of smoking would possibly affect the freedom of choice or lead to the closure of many bars and pubs. However, supporters of this ban place people’s health problems at the top of the scale.

We
can not
can not
cannot
deny the fact that smoking is increasingly becoming a big problem in our society. It causes negative impacts on smokers and non- smokers.
Therefore
, smoking should be banned in public places because of the following reasons. The
first
reason of prohibiting smoking in public places is that smoking damages not only smokers’ health but
also
non -smokers’ health. Eventually, it causes lung cancer for them. Many studies have shown that more 85 percent of smokers get lung cancer. Unfortunately, people close by smokers
also
get high risk of getting the disease because they become passive smokers. The
second
reason of prohibiting smoking in public places is that smoking makes smokers become addicted.
In other words
, it is very difficult for them to give up smoking or they
can not
can not
cannot
concentrate on doing something.
For instance
, my uncle tried to give up smoking 2 years ago but he could not. Now, he smokes a
package
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pack
of cigarette per day. The
last
reason of prohibiting smoking is that smoking makes smokers waste too much money.
For example
, smokers smoke about a package of cigarette per day which wastes 30,000 VND. What I mean is that they spend nearly one million Dongs per month and over ten million Dongs a year. In conclusion, smoking causes too much
bad
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worse
effects
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effect
on smokers and passive smokers.
Therefore
, I quietly agree with the idea that smoking should not be allowed in public places
Submitted by Vương Anh Hoàng on

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