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Childhood obesity is increasing in Australia. As many as two third of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

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Old buildings are a part of a nation's history. Some people hold the view that old buildings should be destroyed and replaced by the modern ones.
However
, I just agree with
this
 idea to some extent. It is justified to preserve old buildings
instead
 of destroying them.
First
, historical buildings play a vital role in fostering a sense of identify, heritage and connection to the past, which helps people to understand the history that had happened before they were born. In fact, these buildings give people connection to social values, beliefs, religions and customs that once shaped their cities, which puts them in touch with their past to ensure they never forget their roots and the history of their cities.
Second
, by maintaining heritage buildings, c city is able to develop heritage and cultural tourism and bring economic prosperity to the city.
For instance
, tourists
can provides
Suggestion
can provide
 local people with jobs like tour guides, hotel staff and restaurant services, which helps to
boosting
Suggestion
boost
 the local economy
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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