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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Yes, I do feel that universities should have an equal budget for their libraries as well as a
sport
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activities
Suggestion
activity
. It is our general belief that a good player
can not
can not
cannot
 be a good student and
hence
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 we restrict our children’s
sport
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 activities at
college level
Suggestion
the college level
.
Moreover
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, an academic degree has much more value than
sport
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 activities which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies than their interest in
sport
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. Most of the universities keep sports at
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last number
Suggestion
the last number
 of their priority list, because of which good players do not get enough facilities and equipments to improve their skills and eventually they
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their interest.Universities can play _ substantial role in shaping
this
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 upcoming talent by providing good trainers and equipments which is
otherwise
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 too expensive to afford.
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Also it
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Also, it
 will attract other students towards sports and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them. Universities should produce
genious
someone who has exceptional intellectual ability and originality
genius
geniuses
 in all fields rather than only concentrating on progress of scholars.
Hence
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, I feel that universities should allot equal amounts of money to
liabrary
a building that houses a collection of books and other materials
libraries
 as well as
sport
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 activities.
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