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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#development #communication #people #friends
In
this
 day and age the idea of humans will never be alone with online
communication
. It has turned into an immense discussion, with many human beings holding various attitudes
to toward
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toward this
this
 issue.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 partly agree with the above expressed statement
since
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for
 worthwhile reasons lie in my viewpoints to support in
this
 contextual essay.
To begin
 with, the main reason to consider is rooted in the fact that
this
 means of
communication
 is able to establish closer
relation ships
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationships
 between people individuals all over the
world
 via the internet since, the widespread use of social networks and instant messengers gives them the opportunity to be friends with each other. The
further
 explanation which is capable of supporting the point held by me is that The network has many sources that connect people from different parts of the
world
, and people use them every day,
this
 is due to the fact that people make extensive use of messengers and make new friends from different countries or join different communities.
As a result
, people from different parts of the
world
 share their ideas, learn about unknown cultures and hobbies. There are those who argue
,
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,
on the other hand
, that using only online
communication
 are able to have adverse effects
this
 is truly advocated as people can lose touch with people from the real
world
. In the light of these facts, one can conclude that online
communication
 may help only when relatives or friends lives far from their home or country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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