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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate all subjects at school, but others disagree this statement, in their opinion it would be better to study one subject that they are interested in, give your specific opinion

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In general there are most masses think that every subjects should be thought in order to invest benefits to our society,
otherwise
 opposed to them in many individual`s thoughts, it is not need to
study
 all, only
one
 or two vital and interesting subjects must educated, On the
one
 side, in the modern schools people have challenging to
study
 unmatched and variety of subjects,
although
 people try to concentrate more sciences they cannot accomplish fully, so that in my perception teenagers should learn
subject
 which are so excellent for them, if person focus on and
study
one
 thing they can achieve fully and faster it brings large circle of success in the future, absolutely the pupil do not interested in learning all of them, the government have to understand people`s situation. It would be perfect if they give a chance people to
study
 only
one
 or two
subject
Suggestion
subjects
. On the other side, it is considered that if all subjects are thought during period of school, people will be more well educated and skillful, exactly it helps younger to choose what
subject
 they are interested in, and what profession they have a talent for, after graduating education they can follow
one
 specific occupation, they will have already experiences to choose,, In my conclusion teenagers should learn few courses which are two or
one
subject
, bring people a large window of opportunity, the cause they have enough to completely learn, and they become expert in the field of his career…
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