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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the recent decades, we
are facing
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are faced
 with many environmental problems. The chief problem
of
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with
for
 them is the climate
change
. The pollution of the environment has been getting worse through the time and it leads to the
change
 of the weather
such
 like the global warming. So there are many opinions about
this
 situation.
Hence
, in
this
 essay, I will discuss about two opinions and will suggest my view. On the one hand, it is argued by many people that we have to prevent the climate
change
. They think that it can bring much more serious hazard. It causes disasters
such
 like flood, drought and storm. And they threaten the
live
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lives
 of people. According to a recent study, it shows that the level of the sea has been rapidly rising because of the global warming, so some nations will be flooded in the near future.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 argue that we should block the climate
change
 before coming bigger dangers.
On the other hand
, several people assume that it is important to find a method to live with the
change
 of the weather. They think that we can’t resolve it and it will be worse more and more. So it is vital to seek a way to live with it rather than investing the time in blocking it that can’t be solved. To conclude, in my opinion, I believe that we have to take a measure to repair
this
 situation. Because if we do not take an action to prevent and just neglect it, we will face with much more serious
risks
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risk
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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