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Writing Samples
Band 2

the information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004. Fairtrade is a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been
paying
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 an officially agreed fair price.
However
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, there are five countries in comparison
,
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:
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 the
UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden.
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, the Fairtrade-labelled coffee
sales
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 in 1999,
Switzerland
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has
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had
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 the highest
sales
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 of 3 million euros.
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, the
UK
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has
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had
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 the highest
sales
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 in 2004 with 20 million euros.
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, there is a huge improvement in the
UK
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 because in 2004, the
sales
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 of
other
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the other
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 4 European countries
are
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were
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 far more different from the
UK
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.
Secondly
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, the Fairtrade-labelled banana
sales
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 in 1999,
Switzerland
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has
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had
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 the highest
sales
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 of 15 million euros. In
this
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 year,
Switzerland
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 has the highest
sales
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 in 2004 as well.
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, in
this
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case
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case,
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 farmers have been paid
higher
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a higher
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 price or
higher
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a higher
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 quantity
with
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apply
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the others. In conclusion
.
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,
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Switzerland
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 is the country that has
more
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the most
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sales
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in
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of
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 Fairtrade-labelled coffee in 1999, and Fairtrade-labelled
banana
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bananas
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 in both 1999 and 2004.
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,
UK
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sales
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 more in caffeine during 2004.

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task
Improve task focus by giving a clear overall view in the intro and a short wrap-up in the end. Name the two foods and the five countries, and say what is the main trend across the years.
structure
The plan of essay is seen: intro, two body parts, then a conclusion.
content
Some facts are easy to see and the text is easy to read.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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