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You recently organised al all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a loca hotel. in their feedback, participants at the meeting said they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Mrite a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

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I am the official representative of
SH.A.R.S
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the SH.A.R.S
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 organisation and we organised our annual meeting at your hotel. The reason that I am writing
this
 letter to you is to provide some
feedbacks
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feedback
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 from the participants on
this
 very important meeting of our organisation. We had invited some guests from other countries and their feedback is included too. The participants enjoyed staying at the hotel as they found it very comfortable. The conference hall where our event took place was perfect and
equiped
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equipped
 with a good sound system. We want to congratulate
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you for
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for
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on
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 that investment. One unsatisfactory feedback is about the food served at the restaurant. The participants were complaining because the food was served cold. It
also
 was overcooked and not tasty. I would
recomend
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recommend
 you to take into consideration
this
 issue. Maybe you have to hire a better chef so your restaurant food quality can be improved at the highest levels which
this
 hotel really deserves. I hope
these
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 feedbacks could help you to offer better service. Yours faithfully
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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