Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behaviour and academic achievement.

School
uniforms
differ from
school
dress codes, which set rules about what cannot be worn but do not need a specific set of attire. Some
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that codes and
school
uniforms
are the codes and
school
uniforms
are
such
restrictions limit
students
’ freedom of expression.
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on the other
side
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some
group
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of people believe that the
School
Uniform Policy serves as an improvement in a student’s life, but it restricts
students
’ freedom of expression and could be costly. In
this
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I will discuss both
the
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views.
Firstly
,
school
uniforms
make schools safer for
students
, create a “level playing field” that reduces socioeconomic disparities, and encourage children to focus on their studies and not their clothes.
Students
focus more on their studies and what is occurring in class than being less concerned about the clothing the
students
are wearing.
School
uniforms
have helped decrease violence and theft. It has helped prevent
students
from concealing weapons under baggy clothing, making it easier to keep track of
students
on field trips and
make
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intruders on campus more visible.
Uniforms
promote positive behaviour and have allowed
students
be
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part of the
school
spirit and to be proud of their
school
pride.
On the other hand
,
students
’ right to express their individuality,
have
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no positive effect on behaviour and academic achievement, and
emphasize
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the socioeconomic disparities they intended to disguise.
Students
love to experiment with their clothing and accessories and to have to wear
uniforms
now limits
students
to express themselves; it is restricting individuality. Sometimes clothes can show your opinion emotions and expression. Many opponents believe that
school
uniforms
do not stop bullying and may increase violent attacks.
Uniforms
make bullies better
to
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target
students
from the public, especially from other schools. In my opinion,
although
there
a
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great point for either
sides
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opinion, I like the idea of
uniforms
. It is more cost-effective, helps prevent
students
feeling
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different based on how they dress, and ultimately creates convenience for the student and parents. If it were up to me, I would love to see more schools choose
uniforms
over
the
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regular clothing.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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