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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The health service is an important need of our life.Healthiness is a human being's most valuable asset which should be on the top of any country's priority list. As my view is concerned
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I will shed light on the following subsequent paragraphs. I agreed that, every country should take care of residents by providing them free medical services because a healthy citizen can give rise to prosperous country.In many countries, people belong to a lower income group, so they don't have enough money to spend on expensive health system. People not even visit to a professional in fear of money and visit some illegal practitioner. In the result, sometimes illness comes aggressive and lead to death of the patient. .
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, undeveloped countries facing that serious issue of medical facilities.
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, if the ministry spends all expenses on public without taking some amount fee the debt will increase. The economy will shake and the burden of the all expensive medical services comes with general public shoulders as in the form of increased in prices. Its better ministry should charge some tax to citizens so that, ministry expenditure does not overflow through the limit.For Example, developed countries citizen pays taxes to the state for free medical services. In a nutshell, I suggest medical facilities should be free so that citizen can enjoy the health and long life and they charge tax to make a strong economy and their expenditure will not rise..
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