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Some people believe that subjects such as art, music, drama and creative writing have a bright future. Therefore, schools should spend more time teaching these subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The technological advancements are applied in various areas which affect our lives. The
agriculture
 is one of those areas. One of the purposes of using these advancements is to increase the a number of products.
However
, the supply of
agricultureal
relating to or used in or promoting agriculture or farming
agricultural
 goods is not enough for people around the
world
. The population
increasing
Suggestion
is increasing
increases
 around the
world
 leads to more consumption,
however
, there is a limited number of
agriculture
Suggestion
agricultural
 products. The reputation of being a farmer is not good as they earn a little amount of money, so that more people tend to work outside the
agriculture
 area.
For example
, farmers' children give up on their parents’ occupation and move to the town to be a white-collar worker. Nowadays, the proportion of
agriculture
 jobs is small compared to other jobs.
Therefore
, despite of the advances in
agriculture
, the products are still not enough for the whole
world
. To solve
this
 problem, it needs for every part of
countries
Suggestion
the country
country
 the prioritising the
agriculture
 area. The government is required to impose the law in terms of helping farmers. To illustrate, farmers' problems always
occure
come to pass
occur
 when trading with middlemen which is the price of their products sometimes is too low. The government can help by establishing the special
institution to
Accept comma addition
institution, to
 eliminate these middlemen so that the farmer can have benefits directly, which it can be a motivation for people to start their agricultural business. In my opinion, the limited numbers of agricultural products and the population increasing in the
world
 are the reason why people are still hungry.
This
 problem can be solved by attracting people to work more in the an agricultural job
such
 as eliminating middlemen. More people
invloved involved
connected by participation or association or use
involved
involved involved
 in
this
 area, more goods will be produced.
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