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Nowadays, families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Every province has different traditions & cultures and that would aid child to grow & evolve in a discreet individual. Some folks suggest that, if a ménage migrates to territory with their children, it’s a remunerative act for their fate while others argue that, it will create an uncertain situation for them and detrimental to their curriculum.
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 with, people
move
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 from one to another region, they have to face up some adverse effects.
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, when students attend their varsity in another state or country, they feel discrimination between them and fellow students. They might have a problem linguistically and
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 approach might end up with a disappointing behaviour and homesickness.
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, their different tradition might not usually as them. Their folks may not as helpful as in their province.
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, many families choose to
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in
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 developed territory for their growth on a monetary basis, but, they feel humiliation from the natives and irritate with their adamant state of mind. With these bizarre events, they do not choose to
move
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 from one to another.
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, choosing another country for
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 curriculum activities or for own purposes is a reasonable reason for moving into a foreign area. It’s a remunerative way to learn discrete cultures and traditions. In terms of comparison, developed countries have adequate tract to lure the individuals via their fascinating schemes and their per capita income ratio.
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, as per the views, I believe in the opinion of, when people relocate their residents in other provinces, it’s quite an arduous effect on children, but overall, it’s beneficial for both child and their household members to
move
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 for better & prosperous fate.
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