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Only 20% of Tech Jobs are Held by Women. What problems do women face that prevent them from getting these jobs and what must be done to change this situation?

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The contribution of women from arts to science is remarkable. Still, there is one sector where women hold just one forth of the positions and,
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 the
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 sector. Many feel long working hours and gender pay-gap are the main culprits. But there is a solution to every problem and
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 companies should be more open minded and flexible towards women's participation in the technological sector. There is no doubt that women tend to be better off, when it comes to managing
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 and personal life. And, one of the major reasons for less women entering in
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 jobs is because of the poor
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 life balance. As many technical positions require long working hours and even working at client sites. In countries like India, women are compelled to either look for a lower salary job or get married.
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, employers prefer male professionals despite plenty of well deserving women in the market. But there is still a glimmer of hope and things are improving rapidly. Many companies have started flexible working hours along with
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 from home options.
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 trend has allowed women to continue their working even after marriage.
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, women can now
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 from home and can manage their families and kids, without leaving the premises.
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 trend has just brought women back into the
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 scene and created a pool of independent women.
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 essay discussed the reason why only 20 percent of women join
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 jobs because of family and
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 life balance issues.
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,
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 discussed the solution of implementing new
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 policies and allowing women to
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 remotely, and can bring back women into
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 roles again.
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