Some people think playing computer games is bad for children on everything. Others think it has some positive on the way children develop. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A quarter of a century after independence,
this
Central Asian country, in which youngsters under the age of 24 comprise 52% of the population, continues to be seriously lacking in
school
and university infrastructure. These challenges raise many questions about Uzbekistan’s development. Since, in todays world people the most vital factors in getting
well-paid job
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a well-paid job
is
education
. Today, less than one-quarter of age-eligible children are enrolled in nursery schools. At primary and secondary
level
, hundreds of thousands of students attend overextended schools in shifts. Symptomatically, the state struggles to recruit teachers: low salaries, extremely long hours, and low prestige make teaching an unappealing career path. The limited number of teachers means that fundamental subjects
such
as mathematics are poorly taught or
even not taught
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not even taught
at all. Upon leaving secondary
school
, just one in every eleven students can expect to be admitted to an Uzbek university—and even
then
, employers disparage
this
education
, which they consider to be rote learning based on state ideology, disconnected from the needs of the labour market, and possibly even for sale, in fact corruption pervades the country’s higher
education
. On top of
this
, many schools operate in two or three shifts: pupils receive only a few hours’ instruction every day so that every student can be taught. Classes continue to be overcrowded as many as 40 pupils and many
school
students must work three to a desk and loads of homework to deal with. The average salary of a teacher or professor is vastly insufficient to ensure a decent standard of living. Many teachers are obliged to hold several jobs just to meet their family’s basic needs. The difficult working conditions and meagre salaries breed corruption among teaching staff, especially at the tertiary
level
. These conditions
have considerably devalued
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considerably devalue
considerably devalued
the profession and
demotivated
a growing number of students graduating from teaching institutions. Many change their career path after graduation or leaving the profession after only a few years of teaching, moving to better-remunerated and more socially esteemed professions
such
as secretarial work or interpreting. In 2017, it was estimated that Uzbek schools need 20-25% more teachers.
This
deficiency is particularly acute in certain subjects, including English, economics, mathematics and computer science. Children from disadvantaged backgrounds
also
tend to be concentrated in low-quality schools or overcrowded classes. The disparities are even more pronounced in tertiary
education
: 59% of university students belong to the
quintile
power to direct or determine
control
of the most well-off families. While 69% of students pay tuition fees at bachelor
level
and 75% at masters
level
, many Uzbek households are unable to afford the enrolment fees; sometimes, they cannot even afford lodging near or transport to the university.
Lastly
, economic and social difficulties have pushed several million Uzbeks (at least three million in 2017 alone) to work abroad,
in particular
in Russia. While the remittances sent home may contribute to financing the educations of children from underprivileged backgrounds, the absence of one or both parents can
also
negatively impact a child’s development, including his or her motivation and assiduousness at
school
as well as behaviour.
Mirziyoyev
decided to re-increase the years of obligatory schooling from 9 to 11 years, a positive
decision but
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decision, but
one that
nevertheless
risks exacerbating the existing teacher shortage by requiring some 22,000 more teachers.
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