Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is said that
music
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is able to gather people from various cultures and ages altogether. I
am complety agree
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completely agree
am completely agree
have completely agreed
with
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point of view. People could listen to any song that they like despite the lyric written in
foreign language
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a foreign language
.
Therefore
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, fans of a certain
artist
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may create a fandom with many people from different
countries but
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countries, but
share the same love for that
music
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. Elders and youngsters could easily share or discuss about their
music
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,
also
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, do some meaningful activities as a fandom.
For example
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, many fans of
korean
of or relating to or characteristic of Korea or its people or language
Korean
pop
music
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usually do
flashmob
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dance cover their favourite
artist
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in order to send some
heartful
causing hurt
hurtful
hateful
heartfelt
messages.
Music
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also
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plays an important role in connecting human. When producing a song, an
artist
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may write the lyric based on his or her own personal experience or events to tell a story. The
artist
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's audience could somehow
related
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relate
to their stories and have sympathy. Some fans are patients, who are struggling with their own illness, seek
couragement
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and
streagth
successive (without a break)
straight
strength
through the lyric of the song of their favourite artists. Those are moments when
music
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truly helps people from distant can connect with each other and heal others.
Music
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will always be an
indespensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
part in human life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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