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today the high sales of the popular consumer goods reflect the of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold

#sales #consumer #goods #society
Some people felt that what the government was doing violated public freedom. They object to paying large financial fines
for example
, riding a motorcycle without a helmet, even though they can personally accept the risk. People who smoke and eat unhealthy foods argue that they are at less risk to their health than horsemen or skiers and
that is
 a dangerous sport that must be banned, not food. Businesses complain that health and safety regulations mean they spend too much time and money to protect from very low risk, and that
this
 has a negative impact on their business and the national economy. Others reject the government's advice about saving money when they see an increase in state loans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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