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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In the current era of industrialization, the use of Fossil fuels has increased drastically and will lead to depletion of these resources in coming future disturbing the ecological cycle.
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, the experts and Scientists have started investigating the alternate power
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 which can generate
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 in comparison to that of fossil fuels. In my opinion, I completely agree that it is a positive development and should be encouraged to
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 research. The following essay would discuss my understanding in detail.
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 with, one of the prominent disadvantages of fossil fuels is that it is not a renewable origin of
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, which take enormous time for its regeneration in comparison to the rate at which people are consuming.
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, if there will be no control on the usage rate of these biofuels, it would be a history for the coming generations. In continuation, the alternate
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 is an everlasting
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 of vitality. The intensity of sun, Wind and Sea does not release the toxic gases and pollute the environment.
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, burning of fossil fuels causes the release of carbon dioxide, which is the main reason for the depletion of the ozone layer as well as for global warming. The emission released by vehicles causes a dense fog in winter affecting the visibility leading to accidents on highways and affecting the schedules of Public transports. The disadvantage of alternative cause of
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 is the initial set up cost is high and is
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 dependant on geographical location.
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, windmills are to be set up on mountains, but once installed maintenance cost is negligible. And it is
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 dependant on climatic conditions. To conclude, the research and investment in alternative
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 of power should be encouraged by the authorities to replace biofuels for clean and healthy environment.
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