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Some people believe that adults get motivated to exercise and play sports because of the major sports events such as the olympic games and the football worldcup. Others say that there are many ways apart from TV to encourage them to exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different views on what are more effective ways to inspire adults to do sport. While some believe that television spot programmes are the most influential method
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others claim there are other approaches that are of the same importance. I
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 am of the opinion that
youngesters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 can be encouraged to do exercise by a wide range of strategies. On the one hand, these
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days, a
 growing number of people devote a tremendous amount of their time to watching TV.
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by
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 constant exposure they are easily influenced and attracted by programmes.
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, the accomplishments and awards given to sport stars
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or the admirations toward winners can trigger
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a feeling of excitement
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 in
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the audience
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, the influences of education and accompany should not be ignored.
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 be more precise, the more people are spending time with their peers who are mainly involved in outdoor activities the more people will be aware of the positive outcomes of doing sport. Not only
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, if individuals are taught about the
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pros
brains
prince
 of taking exercise
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all the way through
during
 their impressionable ages and be familiar with the
unforgttable
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unforgettable
 sensations gained by doing physical activities, they are more likely to be active people. To conclude with
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an overall
, the
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effects
 of mass media are as similar as having sporty
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
 and education regarding being encouraged to do exercise.
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