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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more importhat than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Studying
History subject
Suggestion
the History subject
 is very important in school, is thought by some people, whereas, few students believe in today’s world, increasing knowledge in Science and
Technology
 is much more important.
However
, while
History
 educates us with our past and teach us the importance of life, in my opinion Science and
Technology
 aware us about advance technical achievements and better
future
. With regards to a student,
History
 makes you to understand the life cycle, it teaches about our ancestors, how different civilizations started and how we managed to win the battles against our enemies. Studying
History
 will
no
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
,
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,
 will encourage an individual to get the answers to many questions, whether it is about wars, it was about lifestyle or equipments used by people in the past. To illustrate, study in University of America stated that “Student studying about their country's
history
, make them able to predict the right decision for present and
future
 scenario”.
On the other hand
, Science and
Technology
 students in school are motivated into inventions and innovations. Science and
Technology
 student show their interest in a new form of
technology whether
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technology, whether
 it’s in the food department, defence department or construction department.
For example
, in research it is found that, people studying science and
technology
 have developed a higher IQ level as well as ability to solve problems, as compared to student studying
History
.
Furthermore
, learning new skills of science and
technology
 will give you boost to be ahead in life and plan for
future
 career wise, and
also
 increase interest in few people to study more. In my opinion, people should focus on their present and
future
, and reform their knowledge by being up to date. Studying science and
technology
 in school play much more important role than studying
History
.
Submitted by Anil Anand on

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