ome people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities (crosswords, chess etc.). Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

While some people are of opinion that it would be useful to be involved in physical activities, others believe that it is a waste because these are not feasible and prefer engaging in mental activities (like chess, crosswords, etc.).
This
essay will examine both sides of the views. Many people claim that
doing physical activities help
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were physical activities, helping
were physical activities helping
were physical activities helped
in improving their health and unwind themselves during
this
stressful schedule. A regular exercise in
gym
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the gym
, fixed time for yoga or 30 minutes walking, as recommended by doctors, helps in
overall movement
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the overall movement
of
body
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the body
and increases blood flow.
Consequently
, it is believed that
such
activities release
hormones which
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hormones, which
help in relaxing the body and make the immune system stronger.
For Instance
, in 1995 New York Times published an article where it stated that 65% of the population who were doing Yoga are more active. These arguments have been criticized by several reasons as not everyone can afford an annual subscription of
gym
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the gym
.
In addition
, elderly people or physically disabled can’t be engaged in all activities of yoga or gym.
Hence
, they choose mental activities like playing crosswords, chess etc.
which
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Which
help
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helps
them to diverge from their daily routine.
Also
, it helps them improve IQ by making their mind sharp.
For Example
, Cambridge University claimed in their survey that 40% aged people who plays mental games feel relaxed and have a feeling of fulfilment in their lives. In conclusion,
although
age, physical status, financial feasibility is a decisive factor
for
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in
some cases; I prefer physical activity as there are overall health benefits when one engages
into
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in
it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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