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Shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of modes of transport with
number
Suggestion
the number
a number
 of trips by children between age 5 - 12 to travel to and from
school
 in two years
(
Accept space
(
1990 and 2010). Units are measured in millions. Overall, in 1990, children used more modes of transport in comparison to travelling to and fro from
school
 in 1990. In 1990, kids of age between 5 - 12
years usually
Accept comma addition
years, usually
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
 to walk, whereas the least amount of children
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
 cycling ten years later.
Furthermore
, the most significant difference in commuting to and from
school
 between both the years was walking. In terms of bus, kids covered
number
Suggestion
a number
 of trips above 6
millions
Suggestion
million
 in 1990 in contract in 2010 they used below 6
millions
Suggestion
million
.
Similarly
, children
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
phyical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
, in 1990 children travelled by cycling more than in 2010 (approximately 6 millions and exact 2
millions
Suggestion
million
 respectively). In 1990 walking and bus usage was just below 6
millions
Suggestion
million
 in
comparision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 to
year
Suggestion
the year
 2010 which is half of
number
Suggestion
the number
 of trips in 1990 (between 2 and 4
millions
Suggestion
million
).
Moreover
, children travelling to and from
school
 by walking in 1990 (just over 12 millions)
was
Suggestion
were
 over double that of 2010, which was only 6 millions.
On the other hand
, children
trvalling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to
school
 by car
passanger
a traveler riding in a vehicle (a boat or bus or car or plane or train etc) who is not operating it
passenger
passengers
 in 2010
was
Suggestion
were
 around 12 millions, whereas in 1990, the figure was slightly above 4
millions
Suggestion
million
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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