many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, tv programs and other media. why is it happening? what can be the solution for it? give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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In today's world
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new technology
such
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as
video
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game can make young generation rudeness so some
parent
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worried about confusing children during long times. It is very crucial to find considerable reasons and I look for solutions to tackle the problem. To being with
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the reason about harsh
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
start with any pay attention act from
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parent
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the parent
a parent
parents
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To explain
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,
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
spend more time on playing
video
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games.
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is mainly caused so nowadays
parent
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are
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is
busy without free time
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Therefore children
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Therefore, children
don't have join with their
parent
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another
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Another
reason can be
video
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games are interesting
also
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the best way to spend time during leisure.
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media
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are
irreplaceable part
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an irreplaceable part
irreplaceable parts
in each
children
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child
. To tackle the problem, the education from parents plays
important role
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an important role
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they
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They
can give refer another activity
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as basketball with their friends
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which
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Which
significant factor is
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parent
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a parent
should play with children or participated children for
prepare
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preparing
food or clean home
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this
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This
methods
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method
can help children
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from
in
get
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getting
away computer game
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another
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Another
way
can be change
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can change
this
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program
with
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to
better
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for
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For
instance
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,
parent
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select
new
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a new video
video
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about
environment
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the environment
or science
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To conclude, new generation
play
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plays
abnormal game
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an abnormal game
that
effect
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affect
their moral value so
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parent
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parents
a parent
the parent
should give
children alteration program
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the children's alteration program
children's alteration program
a children's alteration program
to solve
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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