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Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

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To be honest, the men and woman divide their routine task
in
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at
 home is a great perspective.
the
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The
womans
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
woman's
 transmuted as a working professional in recent years as
succesfully
with success; in a successful manner
successfully
successful
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
woman
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women
 have already proved that they are a proficient performance just as a
men
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man
. Obviously I agree that the husband and wife need to be
share
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sharing
 their home related tasks evenly. Presently the men are
realized
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realizing
 that the
womans
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
woman's
Romans
also
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 need to work and support for the family due to financial circumstances.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
everyman
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every man
 steadily gave a
comaptibility
a feeling of sympathetic understanding
compatibility
 to their wives and relies on them.
sometimes
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Sometimes
 they understand each other and compromising among them.
its
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It's
Its
also
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 creates empathy between them.
result
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The result
Result
 of that
strengthen
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strengthens
 their relationships to another extent.
they
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They
 show support each other
,
Accept space
,
demonstrate the care and love
,
Accept space
,
responsible
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responsibility
,
Accept space
,
expressing their
commitements
the trait of sincere and steadfast fixity of purpose
commitments
commitment
commits
,
Accept space
,
respecting the
indicviduals
a human being
individual
,
Accept space
,
work together to solve the problems etc. When the partners are sharing their responsibilities in domestic
life
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.
they
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They
 set an example of their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 so they will learn the importance of the
life
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 as well as family.
when
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When
 they become adults they have no trouble to share their tasks with his/her partners. After deep understanding of
this
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 topic.
its
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It's
Its
 felt that the working couples encouraged to share the
houshold
a social unit living together
household
 duties
to
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in
 their day to day
life
Use synonyms
.
it
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It
 improves the family
life
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 and career
prospectus
the possibility of future success
prospects
. By shouldering the responsibilities shows that and transform the best traits to their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 and admired them.
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