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26) The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
The
two
 maps express the information about suburb of Stokeford between the 1930 and 2010.
Initially
, in 1930-year village was incomplete with the shops, gardens and houses. But as it seems, it has drastically changed over the eighty years. Overall, as the maps show, it has created farmland in the middle of the street. Despite, river stoker has kept its view.
Furthermore
 a number of houses have extended. As they seem, they have constructed on the southern side of the village. Taking a closer, farmland has set up on the east side of the district else.
As a result
, they were
two
 farmlands. Even though,
two
 shops which situated in the west part of the district have destroyed. Large house on the left side has retired.
On the contrary
, the post office has continued to work in the former place. Primary school got longer and larger than the previous. Considering, it made bigger by adding of
two
 mini primary school buildings. Upon the conclusion, with
this
 way Stokeford village has developed and became better.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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