People doing dangerous sport activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports . Do you agree or disagree ?

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many people are interested to try hazardous sports with the supervision of lifeguards
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many people opine that sportsman solely ought to be responsible for their life and no need for rescue operators
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most of the threatening sports are a part of
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which offers jobs for many people
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a scuba diving rescuer team includes more than two or four workers including ambulance driver
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the chance to risk their lives might be reduced
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • dangerous sports
  • scuba diving
  • bungee jumping
  • rescue workers
  • risk
  • save lives
  • priority
  • regulations
  • guidelines
  • safety
  • education
  • training
  • participants
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