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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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At the end of the secondary school, some students decide to attend at
university
Suggestion
the university
 in order to develop their skills. Other students,
also
 because the
job
 market is changing and many graduates are forced to accept low-skilled jobs outside of their studies' area, decide to work straight away. In my opinion, both choices can be right: everything depends on you and your aspirations. On one hand, there are some professions that require
an
Suggestion
a
university
degree
: medicine and all the healthcare related professions,
for example
. To become a doctor you have to follow a quite strict path and meet essential criteria. The only way to prove that and get your registration is holding a
degree
, so you should definitely attend to
university
.
On the other hand
, there are professions – even high skilled professions – that do not require to follow a specific path. An example can be the Information Technology (IT) jobs: even if that helps, you do not really need to have a specific
degree
 to become a programmer and you can just learn the skills you need by yourself.
At
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In
As
 the eyes of an employer, the successful candidate will be someone who
have successfully partecipated
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has successfully participated
have successfully participated
have successfully participate
 in many open source projects, even if he did not get a
degree
 in the meantime, rather than someone who holds a
master
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master's
degree
, but without any experience in real life. To sum up, I think that we should not focus on degrees themselves, but
on
Suggestion
in
 different professions and on the most effective way to achieve our dream
job
. If you need to have a
degree
 for your profession, or you think that you can learn better the required skills in
an
Suggestion
a
university
 environment, just go for that; if you check what skills the
job
 market is requiring for your dream
job
 and you think that you can learn that just by practical experience, try to get useful experience straight away
instead
.
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