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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? Write at least 250 words.

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Health is wealth, I hope you must have heard
this
 phrase so many times in different gatherings, social media and discussions. In today’s scenario, one cannot take any risk with your life. You have to continuously monitor your diet in every circumstance, whether you are travelling, working, family functions, parties and even when you are at home. Any kind of ignorance can lead to major health issues. The most common difficulties that people face in maintaining their diet are as follows.
Firstly
, stress is one of the most deleterious point in today's society. There, a huge number of people in workplaces, are going through
this
 problem. Continuously, mental pressure is created in order to achieve targets and deadlines, which completely devastate their personal life.
This
 lead to following consequences
such
 as less sleep, inappropriate eating habits and no time of exercise.
For example
, a friend of mine has recently left her job in order to reduce weight and improve her dietary habits. She was working as senior software engineer in one the
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menstrual
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 has got disturbed. Immediately, she met a
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gynaecologist
 and got to know that she was suffering
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