It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen?

I totally agree it
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I totally agree with it
. It is necessary to know about the things that are right or wrong for them.
First
of all
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it is
it's
the best way to teach them early.At the age of
ealry
at or near the beginning of a period of time or course of events or before the usual or expected time
early
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the children can learn easily
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So
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when they become as
a
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an
adult
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they can avoid the bad things.
As a result
of learning
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they can make their life
happily
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happy
and at least they know which one is going to bad for them or everyone.
Secondly
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the
punishment
is not strongly necessary for everyone.In
this
way
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I don't like that kind of strict
punishment
.For examples
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slapped
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beaten and
compare
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compared
comparison
to the other children.Mostly it can make bad for
children mind
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a child's mind
child's mind
the child's mind
.Children are easy to learn and teach.
As a result
of unnecessary
punishment
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the children can feel afraid and they pass their life as a bad person.So in my opinion
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we don't even need to punish them.We can just tell them.
when
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When
they will understand what we mean.I am sure they are going to follow it easily. In conclusion
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I agree
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that, except
that except
for
punishment
.In my own experience
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I have been punished even though I made a small mistake.The reason why
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I afraid of making
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mistakes
and I don't really have
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confidence
at all.
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  • moral foundation
  • constructive punishment
  • physical or emotional harm
  • natural consequences
  • losing privileges
  • extra chores
  • positive reinforcement
  • time-outs
  • reflect on actions
  • open communication
  • internalize
  • role modeling
  • positive guidance
  • fear or resentment
  • alternative methods
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