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With the invention of the Internet and all its possibilities, the traditional educational setting of a room full of students with a teacher standing in front giving instruction, has been challenged. It has been predicted that
this
 style of teaching will soon
vanish but
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vanish, but
 I’m quite confident that the traditional
classroom
 may diminish but will never disappear. For university students, it is certainly true that there are numerous benefits
to
Suggestion
of
 distance learning. Lectures can be viewed on a computer from anywhere the Internet is available and often whenever it is convenient. Nowadays
this
 is becoming more common, and the trend will most likely continue to grow.
However
, distance learning is not really feasible when it comes to elementary and high school students who lack the maturity
for
Suggestion
of
 self-study and need face-to-face interaction with a teacher. There are other drawbacks to eliminating the traditional
classroom
.
For example
, it is difficult for students to engage in
classroom
 discussions with each other through a computer and
as a result
 the
classroom
 dynamic will probably suffer due to the absence of energy in the lessons. What is more, without a
classroom
 atmosphere, students, who get most of their knowledge from the teacher, will miss out on learning from each other. It is
also
 important to remember that courses
such
 as chemistry and biology are interactive and require a lab setting, so distance learning is not really possible. On balance, the elimination of
classroom
 learning will continue, but
this
 trend will be limited to mostly adult education and courses which do not require an interactive academic environment. I’m quite sure that thirty years from now students and teachers will still be spending time together in the
classroom
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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