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Some people say that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

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Mobiles have made communication easier and more convenient.
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, sometimes people talking on their mobile phone disturb the surrounding environment and the general public. Because of
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 reason, several people have opined that the
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 of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shops and on buses and trains. I agree with
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 view. When people
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 on a bus or train make or receive calls on their mobile phone, they are causing a great deal of disturbance to other passengers. In order to ensure that the listener can hear properly, the caller often talks too loudly.
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 can disturb fellow passengers who may be reading or sleeping. And when people driving a vehicle talk on their mobiles, it can result in fatal accidents.
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 cannot be allowed at all. Libraries are another place where the
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 of mobile phones should be banned or discouraged.
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The library
 is meant for reading and thinking. If people
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 mobile phones when they are
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in
 the library, they will unnecessarily disturb other people reading or studying there. By simply banning mobiles in public places, we cannot perhaps solve
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 need to create awareness about the proper and polite way to
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 mobiles in public places. Mobile phones have become an integral part of our
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life
. In fact, most of us can’t even imagine a life without our mobiles. They are
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 a blessing in emergencies. In
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 situations, their
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 must be permitted. To conclude, there is a real need to ban the
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 of mobile phones in public places. It is true that they are a necessity and have enriched our lives in many ways, but their excessive
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 in public places must be discouraged at any cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Etiquette
  • Tranquility
  • Prohibit
  • Intrusive
  • Courtesy
  • Essential communication
  • Public decorum
  • Designated areas
  • Safety concerns
  • Noise pollution
  • Digital etiquette
  • Enforcement measures
  • Civic responsibility
  • Silent mode
  • Connectivity
  • Invasiveness
  • Social norms
  • Policy implementation
  • Moderation
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