Some TV programs and video of violent games are harmful for children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

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Some things are extremely detrimental for children like videos of violent games and some

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programmes. While these things produce anger management and lack of

concentration

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issues. There are ways we can

use

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to avoid these harmful effects

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.g.

involving

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Involving

them in physical activities and using parental

control

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settings in

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the TV

and apps. Violent

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programmes and games produce anger management issues in children. These programmes and games show blood, guns, killings

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.t.c.

which

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Which

affect their mind in a negative way. I have personally seen my own child along with

few

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a few

of my relative and

friends

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friends'

children that after watching violent video games on

youtube

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YouTube

and WWE programmes they become aggressive. They hit each

other especially

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other, especially

one day my nephew hit my

son

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with a chair and

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of being shameful he was happy and feel victorious just like wrestlers do in WWE wrestling. Children

also

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develop lack of

concentration

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issues. As these programmes are extremely addictive. Children can think of nothing else except watching these violent things.

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, after watching these programmes sometimes, I observed that my

son

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does not listen to what people are saying to him. Usually, if I ask him something,

instead

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of replying me he started about talking about these

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programmes and games. The

first

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way to solve

this

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issue is to engage children in a physical activity like exercise or play physical sports. They released their energy and get tired and their mood becomes happy.

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, I involved my

son

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in two physical activities

refers to the speaker or writer

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swimming

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Swimming

in the afternoon after school and soccer in the night with me before going to bed. Expeditiously I see the change in his behaviour. He started

concentration

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improves and his aggression decreases.

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, we should

use

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parental

control

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settings in smart

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and apps. I think we should buy a smart

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and

use

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parental

control

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settings to stop children from seeing violent videos and

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programmes. I have a time limit to restrict my

son

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from

overwatching

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over watching

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, the password-protected some channels so that my

son

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can not watch them. To conclude,

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programmes and violent video games that are detrimental for children and are causing aggression and

concentration

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issues in children should be addressed on priority

bases

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. Children should be engaged in physical activities and there should be some check and balance on their activities related to watching

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programmes and violent video games

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you

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You

can

use

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parental

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setting in smart

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and apps.

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Some TV programs and video of violent games are harmful for children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many poeple try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to differenet people? What is your view of success?

some people say that internet should be regulated. others are against any forms of internet censorship. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.