Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some people, we should protect all wild animals, others think we should just protect some of them. There exist argument to support both sides
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here.
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree with former view. On the one side, in the world have a lot of types of wild animals and most part live in
forest
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the forest
a forest
. Some wild animals have disadvantages
for
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in
life
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,
such
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as, nature,
environment
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the environment
and for other animals.
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, we should not protect them.
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Also their
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Also, their
amount is majority and
for
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since
them
people in general
they
need some food.
Moreover
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, they very dangerous for people and other home animals. According to some Korean
scientists
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scientific
scientist
scientists'
researches demonstrated the wild animals have
more negative influence
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a more negative influence
for
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of
environment than positive. On the other side, we should protect all types of animals, because the index of some animals
are
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is
very tiny and entered for RED BOOK.
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, we must care
them
a cooperative unit (especially in sports)
team
and make opportunities for them to
living
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live
.
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Also we
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Also, we
should not
worried
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worry
about their negative effect, because all wild animals eat each others and their amount were keep stability.
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, rare animals very important for
next
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generations. Because they should not watch them on the TV, they must see them in the real
life
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. To conclude, admittedly the wild animals are dangerous, but they useful for
life
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,
such
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as, our children's imagination and the nature.
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Also they
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Also, they
live in
this
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life
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like us.
Therefore
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,
i
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I
think we must care them and protect them from hunters and we must
created
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create
for them
comfortable place
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a comfortable place
to live.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
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