Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some people, we should protect all wild animals, others think we should just protect some of them. There exist argument to support both sides

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here.

However

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agree with former view. On the one side, in the world have a lot of types of wild animals and most part live in

forest

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the forest

a forest

. Some wild animals have disadvantages

for

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life

such

as, nature,

environment

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the environment

and for other animals.

Therefore

, we should not protect them.

Also their

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Also, their

amount is majority and

for

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since

them

people in general

they

need some food.

Moreover

, they very dangerous for people and other home animals. According to some Korean

scientists

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scientific

scientist

scientists'

researches demonstrated the wild animals have

more negative influence

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a more negative influence

for

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environment than positive. On the other side, we should protect all types of animals, because the index of some animals

are

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very tiny and entered for RED BOOK.

Therefore

, we must care

them

a cooperative unit (especially in sports)

team

and make opportunities for them to

living

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live

Also we

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Also, we

should not

worried

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worry

about their negative effect, because all wild animals eat each others and their amount were keep stability.

Moreover

, rare animals very important for

generations. Because they should not watch them on the TV, they must see them in the real

life

. To conclude, admittedly the wild animals are dangerous, but they useful for

life

such

as, our children's imagination and the nature.

Also they

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Also, they

live in

this

life

like us.

Therefore

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think we must care them and protect them from hunters and we must

created

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create

for them

comfortable place

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a comfortable place

to live.

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
ecosystem
conservation status
ecological significance
holistic approach
endangered species
natural heritage
unforeseen negative impacts
economically non-viable
prioritization
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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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