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Band 5

In some offices, employees work in enclosed workstations or cubicles. Other offices have a more open design, in which there are no walls separating employees from their coworkers. Which type of arrangement do you think is most effective? Explain, giving reasons to support your answer.

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Although
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 in some offices, staff are provided with enclosed
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work-space
space allocated for your work (as in an office)
workspace
 for working, other offices have
open
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an open environment
environment
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 without cubicles and walls for their employees. In my opinion, I believe, enclosed
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work stations
a desktop digital computer that is conventionally considered to be more powerful than a microcomputer
workstations
 are
the most effective
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more effective
 rather than
open design
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the open design
 as
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 arrangement provides
peaceful
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a peaceful environment
environment
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 to the employees for performing their duties. A good reason to provide separate office cabins
to
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for
 the workers is that it provides
peaceful
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a peaceful environment
environment
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 for their
work
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. Peaceful
environment
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 is essential for office working because employees can
work
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 without interference.
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, they can fully concentrate on their tasks. Attending a phone call
form
a giver or sender
from
client
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a client
the client
,
for instance
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, is quite comfortable and feasible in closed cubicles, as there is no significant noise in the background
environment
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. Another point to consider is that closed
work
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 space
help
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helps
 those employees who are sincere, goal-oriented and really want to
work
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 for their organization. Their
work
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 is not disrupted frequently by non interested coworkers because working in a closed cubicle allow them to avoid unnecessary discussions easily.
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 why higher ranking employees,
for example
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, manager and chief executive officer, are provided with separate office rooms by their management.
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, online individual meetings on internet can be conducted easily which are mandatory for many employees in
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 era.
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, offices in which there are cubicle walls separating employees from each other
,
Accept space
,
get the benefit in the long run because of effective and task oriented
work
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 of their employees.
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 will lead to progress of the company as it will greatly influence individuals and organization both. In conclusion, arrangement of enclosed workstations is must in offices because provision of
peaceful working
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a peaceful working environment
environment
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 to the employees is only possible with
this
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 strategy.
This
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help
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helps
 them to
work
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 effectively which will ultimately affect company's progress.

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