You are staying in an alien country. You have recently received a letter from your wife in which she has complained of your son's activities. Write a letter to your son to counsel him. In your letter, write: what you came to know about his behavior why you are upset about such activities what kind of behavior you are expecting from him

My Dear John, Greetings from Africa! It's been a really
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long time since we both have spoken to each other. I would rather say that
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work is keeping me busy most of the
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, I do communicate with your mother often on the phone. That's how I get regular updates about your health and activities. But, since
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couple of calls, she seems to be concerned about your behaviour in the school and at home.
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writing a letter to you.
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you have done exceptionally well in your studies,
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since
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you have not scored well in your exams. I have
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heard about your increased outings with friends. Well,
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you are a boy, with a bright future. If you will focus your energy on the right things, You will do wonders. My biggest concern is your final year in
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which will decide your future. I would not like to see you
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working in the garage or construction site. In order to improve on the current situation, I would like you to attend vacation classes to improve on maths and language
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the things to learn on any given day, which will help you manage
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time and effort
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. Hope that my message is clear to you. After all, you are the one who will decide your faith. I would expect a better commitment from you towards your studies.
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request you to look after your mum till the time I would arrive there.
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Lovingly Chetan
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