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Bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should, therefore, be stopped. Do what extent do you agree with this?

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Nowadays, there have a trend towards the foreign workers are involved in the domestic jobs. Since, In the
last
 five decades, there is an increased rate of the international labours in the many countries. In the meantime, there are many problems arising in the local society and
this
 essay will elaborate my viewpoints in detail and
then
 I'll reach to a proper conclusion. On the one hand, it can be said that, many of the people around the globe are now, hiring the so many international workforce into their countries. Among
this
, many of the available positions for
such
 jobs are known as the 'labour work' which include the construction work, trade jobs and some of the top management positions within the firms.
Such
 of the hirings can have a far more negative effect on the each
country
.
Besides
, when talking about the
country
's economy, there can be threatening to a
country
, if the labour
income
 is going outside of the
country
.
In other words
, domestic workers can be into the trouble, if the
income
 is not being generated among them while
such
 of the
income
 can be limited among the foreign hands of the employees.
Also
,
this
 can be doubtful among the local people were, they will go to struggle with lack of
income
, lack of well-being as well as the instability about their careers.
However
, when talking about the social environment, it
also
 can be threatened by these international employees, because of their differences in the language, behaviour and the culture.
Such
 of the circumstances can be
further
 risen, if the local communities are not ready to accept them into their lifestyle.
Lastly
, to conclude
this
, it can be said that, the replacing foreign labours into the domestic positions can be a real problem for the every
country
 if the government is going to ignore their local workers. So, I strongly agree with
this
 statement.
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