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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are different views about whether the purpose of museums should be enjoyment or education. What I suggest is these places should try to enhance people’s knowledge by different means of entertainments. One of the main targets of museums is to educate people. If It was not the case, what is the
different
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difference
 between museums and playgrounds?
museums
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Museums
 are built to give us information about
variety
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a variety
 of
phenomenon
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phenomena
.
However
, I personally think if they only focus on education, they will have less visitors. Their visitors will be only limited to high school or university students who are interested in the related subjects in the museums. By having
less audience
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a less audience
the less audience
, museums cannot afford their expenditure and will be closed soon.
Therefore
, the purpose, which was educating people, could not be accomplished at all. Museums can add some entertaining sections to their services or mixing educational agendas with some fun activities.
For instance
,
museum
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a museum
the museum
 can provide some video games which are related to their studies or some rooms which history is being taught while people are doing board games. When museums try to be amusing, for all aged and people with distinct educational backgrounds, there will be more audiences and
therefore
, more people are educated by a short visit to a museum. They will make more profit and there will be more investment on museum’s facilities. In conclusion, I
suggest
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suggest, although
although
 it is very important for museums to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 educational purposes, they should
also
 focus on being amusing for their visitors, so their existence is guaranteed.
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