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One problem faced by many large cities worldwide is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest

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Congestion caused by traffic facing the metropolis around the world is a growing concern. There are two
causes
an occurrence of something
cases
 in relation to
this namely
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this, namely
 public
transport
 are inconvenient and uncomfortable, and most people able to afford more than one car due to inexpensive vehicles. Encourage the populace to use public
transport
instead
 and
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 the price of automobiles are some ways to combat the issue. In a sophisticated society, people tend to travel in comfort and dislike the idea of squeezing with strangers during their travel. If there is a more comfortable alternative, they will certainly elect that option without a doubt.
This
 is because not only they can avoid chances of standing while boarding the bus or train, they can
also
 enjoy the time of solitude without other passengers disturbing their journey with loud conversation over the phone or unpleasant smell emitting from certain commuters. There are several actions that governments could adopt to solve the aforementioned problems.
First
 and foremost, a simple solution would be raising the cost of vehicles to make it less affordable for the public. To exemplify, Singapore has employed
this
 method and saw a significant drop in the number of cars on the road as vehicles are becoming exorbitant for most social classes.
Secondly
, ministry of
transport
 can enhance the transportation system by incorporating more trains and buses during peak hours in order to disperse the crowd.
In addition
,
layout
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the layout
 of the train can be improved to cater more commuters.
Consequently
, these solutions could potentially encourage the people to use public
transport
 more often. In conclusion, there is an ever growing trend of congested traffic in the metropolis globally,
however
, government could mitigate
this
 problem by increasing the car prices and make amendments to the public
transport
 to encourage the nation to use them.
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