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Many people think that job satisfaction is important in work. Do you think young people these days should be sure of getting a job satisfaction before taking a new job or should they put salary first?

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The definition of satisfaction varies from a person to person. Having a satisfied
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, has now become a dream for all the employees working in a company. In
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 essay, I am going to explain, why satisfaction in a profession is more important than the salary. The youths of the current generation are more focused on their productivity rather than the income. So, they often look for a satisfying and interesting workplace, where, they can use their skills in the areas, in which, they are specialized. People, nowadays wants to
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 in a stress-free environment, where they can complete their task without any hustle. As per the recent article published in the New York Times, more than 70% of the employees in the United States, leave their employers because they find their
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 environment very stressful.
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, employees
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 consider
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 security as one of a factor to have a fulfilled
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. Having a secured
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 is more important than a high salaried position where you always have a risk of losing it. Many
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 factors increase the stress level.
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, people thinking in a way, that the salary should be considered
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 are
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 not wrong, because, there can be many reasons like, they are only one earning in the entire family and everyone depends upon them. In India, 57% of the families have only one parent acting as breadwinner.
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, for
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 peoples income is an important factor. To conclude that, I still believe, salary plays an important role, but still fulfilment of
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 is a more effective factor at
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, as it will increase your personal growth, will help you nourish your
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 culture and will keep you stress free.
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