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After leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In recent years, a plethora amount of the people
obtain
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obtains
 their
career which
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career, which
 interests them rather than choosing work with high pays. I strongly espouse with the statement,
hence
this
 essay will discuss the value of opting right path as soon as you graduates.
First
 and foremost, High
pay
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paying
 jobs
comes
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come
 with
surplus amout
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a surplus amount
surplus amount
 of pressure. The organizations who hires an individual with big salaries,
also
 expect them to work
back-breaking
characterized by effort to the point of exhaustion; especially physical effort
backbreaking
.
Initially
, it will help to sustain all amenities.
Consequantly
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Consequently
, in
long period
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a long period
 of time, high volume of mental pressure can adversely
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 individuals health, state of mind and can
also
 cause depression.
On the other hand
, dream job can have a
reasnable
showing reason or sound judgment
reasonable
 low pay,
however
, doing what you love will always
tempting
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tempt
. And it
will mettle
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will, mettle
 your chance of success in the future.
For example
, a young guitarist
wont
will not
won't
 earn much in the
begning
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
Benin
 of his career, but if he is good, he will
definatley
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 earn better in
future
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the future
 on the basis of his talent
.
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.
 To conclude, opting
career according
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career, according
 to your passion, is better and peaceful. Rather than running after high paying jobs, which can lead to bad health and negative frame of mind.
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