Some people think that the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects to make progress. Do you agree or disagree?

Science
and technology is increasing in people’s everyday life.
Therefore
, some individual opine that
state
Suggestion
the state
should put money in studying more about
science
subject, which according to them
risen
come into existence; take on form or shape
arose
in
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during
development.
However
, I disagree with the statement and my
further
points will define my argument. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my view is, adding currency in subject like arts would be beneficial for environment and for future generation rather than putting into technology because umpteen number of people like have experience of environment as well as nature of the particular state, so in order to save beauty and atmosphere of the place, arts is the only topic. To give an example, in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
, there are many places where people have
creativity
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created
towards climate to just protect for
next generation
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the next generation
and state
also
assist and encourage them to make it more eye catching.
Secondly
, looking from the
economy
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economic
perspective, it is unavoidable that tourism increase particular county’s economy once they started spending money on arts, design and culture. Giving an example of Australia, they recently started to work on
new idea
Suggestion
a new idea
which is to build industry called “Arts of life” for better convenience for their travellers, which represent their art topic.
On the contrary
, I would not forget the mentioned statement supported by some people. Learning
science
is essential. To understand what is going around in the world and technology,
Science
is the only subject helps to know about it.
For instance
, there are many campaign happens in almost every school and colleges to just provide information related to
science
to the student, which increase their knowledge.
Thus
, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite
science
is important for student and people, my reason that importance of
artistic
Suggestion
arts
learning for climate as well as for
growth
Suggestion
the growth
of nation’s are logically acceptable.
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