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Some university students move away and live on their own while they are attending school, but others live at home with their family while they are students. Which do you think is a better choice? Give reasons to explain your answer.

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In my opinion with regards university students I think it's best for them to go outside. I always recommend that. If they keep staying at home with their parents, there's an extremely likelihood of not having the capacity of leadership or, even, they will grow more insecure about how making a decision by themselves. Teenagers become new adults. They need to know other circumstances outside their family's home. They might need more space and liberty rather than stay at home with parents whom will question and prevent you from doing something
thus
, I'm not saying that's bad. It's just that sometimes they need to do something in order to know what circumstances and risks involved that action rather than having their parents telling it before. They need to learn how the world works by themselves. I was one of them and it was the best decision I've ever made, though, it can be hard sometimes, being alone by yourself when you have so much to do, so many people around, so much to study and so many decisions to make. You develop other skills that it might not grow in other students
such
 as programme what are you going to buy at the supermarket, saving money, not let things for the
last
 minute, to know that the only one that's going to feed you is you, sharing apartments with flatmates... So, definitely, yes, you became more responsible and independent.
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