Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I agree with

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topic. In my

opinion I

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opinion, I

think that

music

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can join

anypeople

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any people

who has different culture

togethr

in contact with each other or in proximity

together

Music

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can make a relationship between people all around the world.

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it has different

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rhythm, but

rhythm but

when

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the

people who listen to

music

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, their feeling will be better. For the example the woman who will be

mom

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a mom

the mom

in the

future she

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future, she

can

use

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music

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to join between

mom

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and her baby. I have known about how to make the patients feel better and some cases of the patients in the hospital, the doctors will

use

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music

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for them. When they patients listen to

music

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(

solf

free from danger or the risk of harm

safe

soft

soulful

music

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) it makes them feel better. And now we don't

use

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music

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only human we can

use

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it with animals and plants too.

Music

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can make us feel better,

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we are different ages, nationalities and culture. When we like the same kind of

music

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. We can join and listen together. One more

example I

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example, I

have

friend

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a friend

friends

and he is

foreigner

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a foreigner

. He is around 25 years old.

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likes to go anywhere with me and he likes to listen Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing

Thi

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the

this

song and he can do it. Now he can sing many Thai songs. Including I think

music

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has some power to make

human's mind

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a human's mind

. And it can make good relationship between people who has different ages, cultures and

nationalites

people having common origins or traditions and often comprising a nation

nationalities

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

237 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
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diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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