Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

I agree with
this
topic. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
think that
music
can join
anypeople
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any people
who has different culture
togethr
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
,
Music
can make a relationship between people all around the world.
Although
it has different
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rhythm, but
rhythm but
when
th
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the
people who listen to
music
, their feeling will be better. For the example the woman who will be
mom
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a mom
the mom
in the
future she
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future, she
can
use
music
to join between
mom
and her baby. I have known about how to make the patients feel better and some cases of the patients in the hospital, the doctors will
use
music
for them. When they patients listen to
music
(
solf
free from danger or the risk of harm
safe
soft
soulful
music
) it makes them feel better. And now we don't
use
music
only human we can
use
it with animals and plants too.
Music
can make us feel better,
although
we are different ages, nationalities and culture. When we like the same kind of
music
. We can join and listen together. One more
example I
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example, I
have
friend
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a friend
friends
and he is
foreigner
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a foreigner
. He is around 25 years old.
he
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He
likes to go anywhere with me and he likes to listen Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing
Thi
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the
this
song and he can do it. Now he can sing many Thai songs. Including I think
music
has some power to make
human's mind
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a human's mind
. And it can make good relationship between people who has different ages, cultures and
nationalites
people having common origins or traditions and often comprising a nation
nationalities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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