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In May cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. do the benefits of increased security out weigh the drawbacks?

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Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether video
surveillance
 in public places has decreased the crime rate or merely reduced the
privacy
 enjoyed by the common citizen.In my opinion benefits of installing
security
 cameras overweight the issues related to
privacy
.In
this
 essay I will try to lay light on the benefits of
surveillance
 over the absence of
security
 camera. In a study conducted by the university of Toronto,
installation
 of
surveillance
 camera reduces the crimes by 80%, a significant number.
This
 fact alone is strong enough to realize the importance of having
security
 cameras. The latest use of state of the art cameras in contact tracing of COVID-19 patient proved the potential of technology to curb the pandemic.If we extrapolate the reduction of crime rate to a state and the whole country and its use in containing a disease one can see the long term benefits. The biggest hurdle in
surveillance
 is the cost of the
installation
.
Installation
Suggestion
The installation
 of cameras requires a huge amount of tax payers money which will create burden of the economy
also
 invasion of
privacy
 is a hot topic nowadays as governments are introducing new laws to control the social media. It is easy to recognise that the decrease in crime rate is good for the economy and benefit will overshadow the cost,
also
privacy
 laws are very tight nowadays with time laws will be more clear and fair. In conclusion, It is quite evident that
installation
 of
security
 camera and increasing
surveillance
 is better of a society.Cost of
installation
 and
privacy
 are few hurdles which can be handled by the collective effort of government and civil society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance cameras
  • Public safety
  • Deterrent
  • Evidence collection
  • Apprehend perpetrators
  • Public spaces
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Civil liberties
  • Abuse of power
  • Misuse
  • Cost implications
  • Monitoring
  • Maintenance
  • Essential services
  • Justice system
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