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In May cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. do the benefits of increased security out weigh the drawbacks?

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Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether video
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 in public places has decreased the crime rate or merely reduced the
privacy
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 enjoyed by the common citizen.In my opinion benefits of installing
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 cameras overweight the issues related to
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.In
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 essay I will try to lay light on the benefits of
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 over the absence of
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 camera. In a study conducted by the university of Toronto,
installation
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 of
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 camera reduces the crimes by 80%, a significant number.
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 fact alone is strong enough to realize the importance of having
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 cameras. The latest use of state of the art cameras in contact tracing of COVID-19 patient proved the potential of technology to curb the pandemic.If we extrapolate the reduction of crime rate to a state and the whole country and its use in containing a disease one can see the long term benefits. The biggest hurdle in
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 is the cost of the
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.
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Installation
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The installation
 of cameras requires a huge amount of tax payers money which will create burden of the economy
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 invasion of
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 is a hot topic nowadays as governments are introducing new laws to control the social media. It is easy to recognise that the decrease in crime rate is good for the economy and benefit will overshadow the cost,
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privacy
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 laws are very tight nowadays with time laws will be more clear and fair. In conclusion, It is quite evident that
installation
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 of
security
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 camera and increasing
surveillance
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 is better of a society.Cost of
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 and
privacy
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 are few hurdles which can be handled by the collective effort of government and civil society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance cameras
  • Public safety
  • Deterrent
  • Evidence collection
  • Apprehend perpetrators
  • Public spaces
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Civil liberties
  • Abuse of power
  • Misuse
  • Cost implications
  • Monitoring
  • Maintenance
  • Essential services
  • Justice system
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